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yes, thats what I meant. Instead of: She is Naraida, the little fairy orphan who is the protagonist from Olivia’s story. You could just say: She is Naraida, the little ...

Sorry!!! I thought that this was about a dog! Knowing now that it was a cat I picture the whole story differently, but its still just as good! I probably ...

Thanks for the comments everyone. I agree with pretty much everything you've said, thanks for your help!

Sorry, I didn't know what a spoiler was, that was just meant to be crossed out!

Even if it could use some work, I think it's a good thing you wrote it. It helps sometimes to write, even if its just for yourself, no one has ...

Not at all. Thanks for the comment, I think you're right about those two lines... I'm new and don't really know much about this, If you have any suggestions it ...